25 Clear Writing
Learning Objectives
Upon completing this chapter, you will be able to
- Apply specific strategies to write more clearly
- Use pronouns effectively and correctly
- Avoid unnecessary embedded dependent clauses
- Avoid double negatives
- Place modifying words and phrases correctly.
Sentence Clarity
Good writers write clearly. Clear writing focuses on communicating with the reader. To communicate well, avoid any overly complex sentence structures or words that could be confusing. Use transitional words and phrases to help clarify the relationship of the ideas you express. Ensure that the subject of your sentence (the ‘do-er’ of the action) is explicitly stated.
Pronouns
Watch this video to learn about common pronoun mistakes and how to fix them:
Vague Pronouns
If you use pronouns like this, that, and it, make sure that your reader will know what these pronouns refer to.
Vague pronoun reference: She negotiated the wage increase and formed a social committee for employees. This makes her an asset to the organization.
Problem: It isn’t clear which of the two actions “this” refers to.
Clear pronoun reference: She negotiated the wage increase and formed a social committee for employees. These experiences make her an asset to the organization OR Her negotiating experience makes her an asset to the organization.
Solution: Adding a noun after the pronoun clarifies what the sentence is referring to.
Redundant Pronouns
Also make sure that the pronoun isn’t redundant (unnecessary). In these cases, the pronoun is referring back to a noun that appears immediately before the pronoun; you can simply use the noun without the pronoun for a more precise sentence.
Redundant pronoun references: The article it stated that communication skills are valued by Canadian employers. In the article, it said only teamwork was more important.
Problem: the pronoun (it) refers to the noun (article) immediately before it.
Clear pronoun references:The Globe and Mail article stated that communication skills are valued by Canadian employers. The article said only teamwork was more important.
Solution: remove the redundant pronoun.
Embedded Dependent Clauses
Avoid embedding dependent clauses. Put dependent clauses at the beginning or end of a sentence. Avoid putting these clauses in the middle of the sentence where they can separate the subject and the verb and make the sentence unnecessarily complicated.
Unnecessary embedded clause: The marketing team, despite the budget challenges, created a strong social media presence.
Problem: the dependent phrase is separating the subject (team) and the verb (created).
Better clause placement: Despite the budget challenges, the marketing team created a strong social media presence.
Solution: move the dependent clause to the beginning of the sentence so that the subject (team) and verb (created) are next to each other at the beginning of the independent clause.
Double (or Multiple) Negatives
Limit negatives. Multiple negatives sometime result in confusion.
Confusing double negatives: He was not unhappy about not failing the test.
Problem: too many negatives make it hard to understand the meaning.
Revision: He was happy he passed the test.
Solution: remove unnecessary negatives.
Modifying Words and Phrases
A modifier is a word or word group that describes another word or words. Misplaced modifiers are in the wrong spot and can make your message unintentionally funny and make your meaning ambiguous. Position modifiers as close as possible to the word or words they describe.
Watch this video to learn more about modifiers and the hilarity that results from misplacing them!
Misplaced Modifiers
A misplaced modifier is a descriptive word or phrase that is not placed closely enough to the person or thing it is meant to describe.
Error: The patient was rushed to the doctor who had been an a car accident. The doctor had been in a car accident? What was wrong with the patient?
Correction: The patient who had been in a car accident was rushed to the doctor. Place the modifying phrase “who had been in a car accident” as close as possible to the noun (patient) that it is describing.
Error: I bought a puppy for my brother named Spot. Your brother is named Spot?!?
Correction: I bought a puppy named Spot for my brother. Put the modifying phrase “named Spot” as close as possible to the noun (puppy) that it is describing.
Error: Susan got every exam question almost right. Susan got them all wrong?? Getting them all “almost right” means that none were right!
Correction: Susan got almost every exam question right. Put the modifying word “almost” as close as possible to the noun (exam question) that is describing. Getting “almost every one right” means that Susan got a high score.
Dangling Modifiers
When the modifying phrase is a dependent clause at the beginning of the sentence, the subject of the main part of the sentence needs to be the subject, or do-er, of the clause. Make sure that the do-er of the action is attached to the modifying phrase.
Error: Having eaten all my dinner, the waiter brought dessert. The waiter ate your dinner??
Correction: After I ate all my dinner, the waiter brought dessert. Explicitly state the do-er of both actions (I ate + waiter brought).
Error: Unpacking the suitcase, a scorpion leaped out! The scorpion was unpacking your suitcase??
Correction: As Mark was unpacking the suitcase, a scorpion leaped out! Explicitly state the do-er of both actions (Mark was unpacking + a scorpion leaped).
Error: To win the baseball team tournament, Louisa should join our team. You want Louisa to win the championship by herself??
Correction: If we are to win the baseball team tournament, Louisa should join our team. Explicitly state the do-er of both actions (we win + Louisa join).
More Practice with Clear Writing
To learn more about modifier errors, go through these slides[1] and try the sample test questions:
For more practice with sentence structure, try these OWL Purdue exercises
Additional Resources for Improving Writing
Try this Linkedin Learning course called Grammar Girl’s Quick and Dirty Tips for Better Writing. When you complete the course, you can add the certificate to your Linkedin profile.
- Modifier presentation created by Krista Ceccolini, Cambrian College, March 4, 2022, shared via the eCampus Ontario Open Library. ↵
